求高手指教，英语软文如何翻译最好？

如果我想要购买你们公司的基金，可以在网上购买吗？
我简单介绍一下我的城市上海，
截至2014年12月28日，上海轨道交通共开通线路14条（1-13号线、16号线），全网运营线路总长548公里，车站337座。上海固定居民加流动人口一共3000万人。如何在网上购买你们公司的基金，申购赎回费用是多少，管理费是多少比例？赎回需要多久？我知道一些银行和保险公司也可以购买贵公司的基金，如何购买手续费最低？

How could I invest in your company's investment funds (or structured notes products)?   Could I  directly purchase through online banking (system) , or have to buy through other brokerage companies or banks?

Could you provide  more details about the procedure of  purchasing, redemption and the related costs and fees?   I also wonder by which way could I lower the purchasing cost or enjoy greater convenience in trading.

Let me briefly introduce my hometown city Shanghai.
By Dec.31, 2015, the total population of Shanghai amounts to ####(including long-term residents and short-term visitors); the total length of 14 lines of underground rail transportation amounts to ####KM. (line 1-13, line16.... 应该是未来还有两条线吧，if needed,可以再解释一下,根据实际情况.....line### is still in construction....will be available for use in ###years)


英文表达注重简洁礼貌,   一定要说COULD,  WOULD
一定要简洁，意群逻辑清楚，不要浪费对方时间

网上操作一定是通过网络银行的,  因为钱在银行里，任何大额转账都要通过银行账户的授权。

老外根本不关心具体几线，关他鸟事，说话要有条理重点
机器翻译出来的语言很可怕，简单的老外真不这么说话

If I want to buy your company's funds, can I buy.  IT online?
I simply introduce my HOMETOWN--- SHANGHAI city.
As of December 28, 2014, the Shanghai rail transit line 14 (1-13, 16), the total length of 548 kilometers of the whole network operations, the station 337. Shanghai fixed population and floating population of a total of 20000000 people.
purchase and redemption fees is how much, how much is the proportion of management fees? How long will it take? I know that some of the banks and insurance companies can also buy your company's funds, how to buy a minimum fee?
and，How much  are your  Company funds purchase fees, management fees, custodian fees, redemption fees？

Can I buy your company's fund online?
Allow me to briefly introduce the city of Shanghai.
Shanghai's rail operation consists 14 lines (line 1-13 and 16) covering a total of 548km with 337 stations as of Dec 28, 2014. Shanghai has a population (residents and non-residents combined) of 30 million.
If I purchase your company's fund online, what are the rates of redemption? How about management fee as a percentage? How long before I can start to redeem? I understand that I can invest in the fund via some banks and insurance companies, is there any way I can minimize my cost?

How can I buy your company's funds, can i buy it online?
Let me briefly introduce the city Shanghai where I live in,
To December 28, 2014, Shanghai Metro has 14 lines (line1-13, and line 16), which has 548 km in total with 337 stations. The number of permanent residents and floating population of Shanghai is 30 million. If I purchase your company's fund online, how does the Redemption fee cost? And how about the rate of Management fee? How long does Redemption take? I know i could also buy your company's funds via some banks or insurance companies. Is there any way to minimize the service fee?

If I want to buy your company funds, can be purchased online?
I introduce my city of Shanghai
As of December 28, 2014, Shanghai rail transit line 14 is opened (line 1-13, line 16), the whole network operation line length of 548 km, 337 stations Shanghai permanent residents and floating population a total of 3000 million people How to buy your company funds on the Internet, how much is the subscription and redemption fees, management fees are what percentage? How long does it take to redemption? I know a number of banks and insurance companies can also buy your company's funds, how to buy the lowest cost?

用有道，然后有道里面还有人工的翻译

If I want to buy your company's fund, can buy on the net?
I make a brief introduction of my city, Shanghai,
As of December 28, 2014, Shanghai rail transit line 14 article (line 1 to line 13, 16), the entire network operating line of 548 km, 337 at the station. Permanent residents in Shanghai with a total of 30 million people of the floating population. How to buy on the net your company's fund, explain buy redemptive how much is the fee, management fee how much is scale? The redemption need how long? I know some Banks and insurance companies can also buy the fund of your company, how to buy the lowest fee?