Is Trading with China Good for America? (大三原创)

One comments:

You have used too many China, American or related word as subjects. And also too many active sentences.
你用了太多的中国、美国或相关词汇作主语。另外就是主动句太多了~~可以尝试改变句式和主语结构~~

呵呵，只是个小的建议~~也是别的老师教育俺的~~

我也是大三，下学期也准备练练论文，顺便把毕业设计完成，在美国读书就是好，以考核为主，而不是单纯的分数来衡量一切。不知道怎么评分，给90分。

sailingyf 发表于 2012-6-5 17:54
One comments:

You have used too many China, American or related word as subjects. And also too ma ...

谢谢你的建议，当时没学过怎么写正规的Economics Paper， 只是用在写作课里学到的方法来写。现在不用那么多主动句了。而且只能用第三人称写学术文章，呵呵。

shenxiaoqiang 发表于 2012-6-5 16:27
Your paper title is ‘Is Trading with China Good for America?’,your answer is ‘yes’. I believe, a ...

This is the first time I saw someone posted such a constructive English comment on my undergraduate paper in this forum. I agree what you said in your comment. However, I already mentioned that I wrote the article before I took any international trade class. I did take an international trade class in the second semester of my junior year. You can continue the research about the bilateral trade between China and the U.S. from the start of my old paper.

In addition, "Buy America" means persuading people to purchase goods made in the U.S. I did not think that was good for the U.S. economic development in the long run, so I added it as one of factors into my undergraduate paper.

Moreover, I have a more formal term paper about tax reform in the U.S. than the one I posted here, which I wrote in Public Economics class also during the second semester of my junior year. If I have time, I will modify the paper and share it on the forum later on.

Thanks again for your constructive comment.

不好意思，评不上了，因为我没看懂一个句子！！投降！！！

Thanks

继续加油啊。

i make it simple, need and market is one thing; you should understand and write it down what china is good at and usa is good at, this can be your basis for reasoning.
likewise decades ago ,chinese labor was cheap,and usa had the world top technology,and then they exchange or trade
ps:i didn't read your whole paper,just the first several paras

paper needs data, data need econometrics
excellent paper need extraordinary econometrics
i could say this is the current trend
cause the best economists had used up the basic theories centuries ago

Maybe you can add a model in your paper.That can make your paper more persuasion.