Schoen, R., & Cheng, Y. H. A. (2006).Partner choice and the differential retreat from marriage. Journal ofMarriage and Family, 68(1), 1-10.
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The contemporary retreat from marriage in the UnitedStates has had a differential impact across socioeconomic and racial groups.Here, 1990 marriage rates and propensities for Virginia, North Carolina, and Wisconsinare analyzed regarding (a) the likelihood that persons in different groups evermarry and (b) patterns of partner choice with respect to race and educationallevel.
第一句话领纲契题,非常关键的词是retreatfrom marriage, 后面使用了differentialimpact across socioeconomic and racial groups, 这种表达方式比较有趣,我觉得我可能很难想到这么表达,而只会表达…differsin their retreat of marriage. 后面紧接着用一句话介绍了数据以及关键的变量,同时还表达了通过分析去investigate了什么问题,这句话非常巧妙,大家可以注意到,它同时表达了三个重点,marriagerates and propensities for … are analyzed regarding ……这里再说明一点,这个数据其实只是三个州的数据,然而大家可以看到数据的局限并不影响发表文章的质量。后面的两个角度,重点学习表达方式,thelikelihood that …..patterns of partner choice with respect to …. 尤其是后面的句子,精简而又清楚。
Marriage remains strong in most race-education groupsbut is substantially lower among Blacks and among those with less than 12 yearsof education. Patterns of partner choice have shifted to show greater symmetrybetween the educational levels of brides and grooms. Change has been modestwith regard to the level and pattern of inter-racial (Black-White) marriage.
这一些部分主要描述了结论,我觉得本段尤其好的地方是,虽然是统计结论,但是你丝毫感觉不到统计语言,这点是和中国论文写作最大的一个区别,来让我们看下他是如何做的。首先,第一句话是一句概括的话,通过结果中总结概括出来的话语。Marriageremains strong in ….but is substantially lower among ….and among …..第二句依然是一个概括,patternsof partner choice have shifted to show greater symmetry between ….虽然我们不能非常明确的知道symmetrybetween ….是什么意思,但是可以从symmetry一个字知道相当,平衡的含义。Changeshas been modest with regard to …. 此处使用了modest看得出是有些统计含义的用词。总结起来,第一需要,总结归纳;第二,需要使用更具含义的单词来表达变化,比较等。Shift\change等
Marriage is increasingly a union of equals, but a unionchosen more by Whites than by Blacks and more by the well educated than by thepoorly educated.
最后的结论更是一个凝练。Marriageis increasingly a union of equals. 注意increasingly表达了变化,union 类比了marriage,equals表达了比较。Buta union 注意后面的定语,chosen more by….thanby ….and more by ….than by …. (well educated …与poorlyeducated 注意这些小词,不要老用highereducation level 和low educational level 这样略显生硬的表达。)